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04-19-2008, 12:01 AM
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Ice Poutine
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The concept is good.

Imho; you need to make the cuts shorter to introduce an element of drama. I mean you need to inject incertainty.

And that sould be done with shorter scenes progressivley at the short film goes on.

And THEN... you slow it up quickly to introduce a contrast with the 1st line; "Nice shoes".

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