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02-23-2010, 12:41 PM
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Articles I Wrote For School Paper

I have two hockey articles I have written for my school paper. The first was a New York Rangers season preview and well I laughed after reading it just now and my second is on the Olympic Trade Deadline. I didn't know where to post this so I kind of just went for it. I want to go to college for writing and journalism and feedback would be much appreciated.

The New Look Rangers
By: Justin Starr

As September and October roll around, kids go back to school and the temperature begins to become cooler. This also means that it is officially Hockey season and teams are going through training camp to see who will make the final cut to make the National Hockey League team. One team that has gone through a drastic change during the off-season is the New York Rangers.

Last season the New York Rangers recorded a record of 43-30-9 and tallied 95 points and then were let down when they lost to the red-hot Washington Capitals led by Alex Ovechkin in game seven of the Conference Quaterfinals. During this past off-season, the New York Rangers went through some major transitions to try and improve their hockey club. Two major areas that the Rangers needed to address during the off-season were their power-play and their offense in general. They were ranked near the bottom in both areas and they were one of the only teams to make the playoffs regardless of being ranked so low.

They started the off-season changes a bit early this year when they fired Tom Renney who was the head coach from 2004-2009 and replacing him with John Tortorella who led the Tampa Bay Lightning to a Stanley Cup Championship in 2004. John Tortorella is all about offense and heart and the Rangers hope that he can be a spark that will help the New York Rangers lack of offense.

Out of the 30 players that played a game for the Rangers last year, 15 of
them are no longer on the team. The Rangers general manager Glen Sather traded Scott Gomez and two young prospects to the Montreal Canadians for Christopher Higgins and three prospects. The brains behind this trade were to free up cap room for more additions to the team and it definitely paid off. By trading away Scott Gomez and his gargantuan contract they were able to sign Marian Gaborik who is among the elite players in the NHL. Gaborik lets his play do the talking and he proved that when he gained the distinction of being one of fewer than 50 NHL players to have scored five or more goals in a single game and is the only one in the 21st century, the ironic thing is that he achieved that milestone against the Rangers. The only downside to signing Marian Gaborik is that he is very injury prone; he has injured his groin multiple times and last year he missed most of the season after under-going major surgery.

The New York Rangers also added two rookie defensemen named Matt Gilroy and Michael Del Zotto. John Tortorella also brought Vinny Prospal who was on the Tampa Bay Lightning when they won the Stanley Cup in 2004. Donald Brashear was also added to the line-up for his grittiness and his passion to protect the all-stars on the team. Ales Kotalik and Enver Lisin were the last two brought in to the repaved Rangers roster to hopefully bring a little more offense this year.

The hockey season has already begun and the New York Rangers are off too a good start with a record of 7-3-1, but they are known for starting off hot and then gradually cooling down as most Ranger fans are aware. Many experts have mixed feelings about how well the New York Rangers will do this year. Some say that they are just a middle of the pack team but if Gaborik stays healthy, they could make a good run for the Stanley Cup. However, others feel that they will stay the same as a team that will lose in the beginning rounds of the playoffs. Is this the year the “Garden Faithful” can celebrate the Rangers first Stanley Cup since 1994, or will it just be another year of being let down?


Trades Cause Cracks in the Ice?
By: Justin Starr


As the Olympic roster freeze is rounding the corner, many general managers are looking to make some changes to their team’s roster. Two teams that made major moves before the roster freeze are the Calgary Flames and the Toronto Maple Leafs. Both teams have made two trades each in which caused their roster to do a 180 with a major makeover.

The Calgary Flames first made a deal with the Toronto Maple Leafs which sent Dion Phaneuf, Fredrik Sjostrom, and prospect defensemen Keith Aulie to Toronto for Matt Stajan, Niklas Hagman, Jamal Mayers, and Ian White. Both Calgary and Toronto weren’t done yet as they both took place in another trade each.

The Calgary Flames also traded Olli Jokinen and tough guy Brandon Prust to the New York Rangers for Long Island native Christopher Higgins and power play specialist Ales Kotalik. The Toronto Maple Leafs also had one more trade up their sleeve as they traded away goalie Vesa Toskala and Jason Blake to the Anaheim Ducks for goalie Jean-Sebastien Giguere.

The biggest trade that happened before the Olympic roster freeze included one of the best goal scorers in the league. There has been speculation of where the Atlanta Thrashers would trade their captain Ilya Kovalchuk. After Kovalchuk declined Atlanta’s contract extension of 12 years for 101 million dollars, everyone knew that Atlanta would be looking to trade away their captain. Many teams have been rumored to be in the running for Kovalchuk such as the Los Angeles Kings, Chicago Blackhawks, New York Rangers and Philadelphia Flyers. In the end, the team that completed the trade for Ilya Kovalchuk was the New Jersey Devils. The Devils traded defenseman Johnny Oduya, right winger Niclas Bergfors, top prospect Patrice Cormier and a 2010 first round draft pick in exchange for defenseman Anssi Salmela and the prize that everyone has been going for, Ilya Kovalchuk.

Some teams have attempted to improve on their team’s roster before the Olympic roster freeze in hopes to make a run for the playoffs. Will these trades help the teams make a playoff push? Will Ilya Kovalchuk live up to the expectations in New Jersey? Only time will tell.

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Not bad...some punctuation and over-usage of words..get an AP style handbook for instance 101 million dollars should be $101 million.... however,media writing is much different than literature and such, so many different styles can factor in...keep it up..


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Prospal was not on the Lightning Team when they won the cup in 2004.

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It's too choppy. It sounds like your trying to force your thoughts. Just let it flow.

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It's too choppy. It sounds like your trying to force your thoughts. Just let it flow.
Somewhat...Most information in the articles aren't his thoughts, hes just stating facts..

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thanks for taking time out to read my articles, really thankful for it.

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Do NOT go to school for journalism.

Unless your goal is to be an elitist ******* who makes $20,000 foreverrrr until someone finally cares what you have to say (except even then the majority of people will hate your freaking guts...ie: Larry Brooks)


Journalism is a joke. Take it from someone who majored in it. It was easy because I was good at it but boyyyyyyy is the market awful right now for a field that is just falling apart at the seams.

Also, it really bothered me that journalists are such scum bags. They honestly think that they're the only ones who can report information because they know how to use AP style and got a degree for it.

This whole new media thing where civilians can post things instantly really irks them because they feel stupid that they went to school for four years and any idiot who sees or talks to someone can post information before them.

They feel entitled because they've been "educated".

I wish I was more mature when I was entering college. Would've selected a major that actually mattered.


EDIT: Also, I didn't read your article because I just don't care. But I guarantee that whoever your professor is for journalism would rip it apart end to end. Chances are they're an elitist ******* too, and the mere fact that you weren't born 40+ years ago when they were means you don't have the work ethic and desire to be a journalist like they did.


Man, I ****ing hate journalism. I thought I'd love it to. What a mistake.


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Hey Justin,

Nice, man! It shows that you have passion and put effort into these articles.

One thing I'd suggest is to remember that in print your articles can suddenly need to be truncated, maybe even last minute when you're not around to do it. So follow the inverted pyramid rule and make sure your most important/most widely relevant information is at the top. For instance, you wait a few graphs to get to the Kovy trade. I think you went chronologically, whereas maybe leading with the superstar trade might have made more sense? With many papers/mainstream audiences, hockey isn't going to get many, if any, column space, so you'll want to maximize the impact of the space you do get.

Another thing I'd suggest is to try to get in touch with the Rangers beat writers. Maybe they could help with general advice/school advice/internship advice/etc?

Personally, I don't know what the future of print media is. Print needs to adapt to the times and to technology and to how people expect/demand information nowadays. Then again, journalism doesn't necessarily mean you have to work at a newspaper. Taking sports journalism for instance, maybe it becomes more of a cross between blogging and tweeting and traditional journalism (access to the organizations/players/etc.). Print readership and revenue continue to drop, and that trend isn't going to change.

I don't know what your hopes and plans are, but I'd suggest talking to as many people in the business as possible. Pick their brains about where they see the industry moving.

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Do NOT go to school for journalism.

Unless your goal is to be an elitist ******* who makes $20,000 foreverrrr until someone finally cares what you have to say (except even then the majority of people will hate your freaking guts...ie: Larry Brooks)


Journalism is a joke. Take it from someone who majored in it. It was easy because I was good at it but boyyyyyyy is the market awful right now for a field that is just falling apart at the seams.

Also, it really bothered me that journalists are such scum bags. They honestly think that they're the only ones who can report information because they know how to use AP style and got a degree for it.

This whole new media thing where civilians can post things instantly really irks them because they feel stupid that they went to school for four years and any idiot who sees or talks to someone can post information before them.

They feel entitled because they've been "educated".

I wish I was more mature when I was entering college. Would've selected a major that actually mattered.


EDIT: Also, I didn't read your article because I just don't care. But I guarantee that whoever your professor is for journalism would rip it apart end to end. Chances are they're an elitist ******* too, and the mere fact that you weren't born 40+ years ago when they were means you don't have the work ethic and desire to be a journalist like they did.


Man, I ****ing hate journalism. I thought I'd love it to. What a mistake.
jeeeez, if you didn't care then why post and kill a kids dream...

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jeeeez, if you didn't care then why post and kill a kids dream...

If the kid wants to do this he's going to do it. He's not going to let some opinionated idiot like me persuade him otherwise.

All I'm doing is giving him my opinon on things since I have experienced them.


The kid's dream is probably succeeding and leading a happy life. If i can give him some insight into something he doesn't yet understand and actually make that happen I'll take it.

No matter what liberals think there is no utopia.

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Do NOT go to school for journalism.

Unless your goal is to be an elitist ******* who makes $20,000 foreverrrr until someone finally cares what you have to say (except even then the majority of people will hate your freaking guts...ie: Larry Brooks)


Journalism is a joke. Take it from someone who majored in it. It was easy because I was good at it but boyyyyyyy is the market awful right now for a field that is just falling apart at the seams.

Also, it really bothered me that journalists are such scum bags. They honestly think that they're the only ones who can report information because they know how to use AP style and got a degree for it.

This whole new media thing where civilians can post things instantly really irks them because they feel stupid that they went to school for four years and any idiot who sees or talks to someone can post information before them.

They feel entitled because they've been "educated".

I wish I was more mature when I was entering college. Would've selected a major that actually mattered.


EDIT: Also, I didn't read your article because I just don't care. But I guarantee that whoever your professor is for journalism would rip it apart end to end. Chances are they're an elitist ******* too, and the mere fact that you weren't born 40+ years ago when they were means you don't have the work ethic and desire to be a journalist like they did.


Man, I ****ing hate journalism. I thought I'd love it to. What a mistake.
wow, geeze, relax. i too have a degree in journalism and i'm currently not in the field (i'd have to assume you aren't either).

but to say it's a waste is idiotic. there are plenty of things i learned and skills i acquired that, while obviously not part of my normal job routine, helped me to get to where i'm at.

but heed his advice about the elitists... no, not ALL journalists are, but he's right, a lot of professors are and yes, they would have ripped your article apart. and that's ok, because you don't have any formal training... some of these guys expect people to come into college ready to write for NYT. it's something you'll have to be prepared for, and if you're not, then do your best not to let it bother you. but i'm getting off topic.

imo you have a natural writing ability. if you want to do journalism, go for it. don't let someone tell you you shouldn't because they had a bad experience. and hey, you can always change majors, and even if you do finish up with a journalism degree, you aren't necessarily glued to that field (unless you want to become a doctor ).


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Do NOT go to school for journalism.

Unless your goal is to be an elitist ******* who makes $20,000 foreverrrr until someone finally cares what you have to say (except even then the majority of people will hate your freaking guts...ie: Larry Brooks)


Journalism is a joke. Take it from someone who majored in it. It was easy because I was good at it but boyyyyyyy is the market awful right now for a field that is just falling apart at the seams.

Also, it really bothered me that journalists are such scum bags. They honestly think that they're the only ones who can report information because they know how to use AP style and got a degree for it.

This whole new media thing where civilians can post things instantly really irks them because they feel stupid that they went to school for four years and any idiot who sees or talks to someone can post information before them.

They feel entitled because they've been "educated".

I wish I was more mature when I was entering college. Would've selected a major that actually mattered.


EDIT: Also, I didn't read your article because I just don't care. But I guarantee that whoever your professor is for journalism would rip it apart end to end. Chances are they're an elitist ******* too, and the mere fact that you weren't born 40+ years ago when they were means you don't have the work ethic and desire to be a journalist like they did.


Man, I ****ing hate journalism. I thought I'd love it to. What a mistake.

Hey, were you a classmate of mine at Queens College journalism ?? Cause you summed up everything I think. lol

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wow, geeze, relax. i too have a degree in journalism and i'm currently not in the field (i'd have to assume you aren't either).

but to say it's a waste is idiotic. there are plenty of things i learned and skills i acquired that, while obviously not part of my normal job routine, helped me to get to where i'm at.

but heed his advice about the elitists... no, not ALL journalists are, but he's right, a lot of professors are and yes, they would have ripped your article apart. and that's ok, because you don't have any formal training... some of these guys expect people to come into college ready to write for NYT. it's something you'll have to be prepared for, and if you're not, then do your best not to let it bother you. but i'm getting off topic.

imo you have a natural writing ability. if you want to do journalism, go for it. don't let someone tell you you shouldn't because they had a bad experience. and hey, you can always change majors, and even if you do finish up with a graduate degree, you aren't necessarily glued to that field (unless you want to become a doctor ).
I'm "studying" broadcast journalism, and you are right. Having a degree in the communications field does not mean you have to become a journalist. There are many things you could venture off into with a degree in communications....ie, journalism, broadcast journalism, public relations, media production, interpersonal communications, etc....go get em' kid..

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